WK1: FaQEyeReddit vs Bereft

[Bag Mandela]

WK1

Punches due: Tuesday 19th August

Voting ends: Friday 22nd August

You know the rules, if not, refer to the rule thread.


@FaQEyeReddit
@bereft

[FaQEyeReddit]

Check check 1-2 1-2

Bereft — that mean missin’ somethin’ vital like his vitals thats the FAQ(facts), end of the line for this cross dresser im about to smoke an actual fag, til Mandela say well thats a drag!..
When is Pride Month? Cuz it’s pride in numbers, he about to die in “flying colors”, but I hear he’s lacking that..

[bereft]

I saved hundreds on vacation thanks to the nose on your head
Because en route to the Grand Canyon, I stopped at your nostrils instead

[Blas]

FAQ: I fear people won't like the long stretched out style but if it flowed a bit better multi wise I wouldn't mind it as much, setup too stretched IMO but it's ok, pride in numbers/flying colors and lacking it connection was solid, didn't mind it tbh thought it was decent overall and the punch hits.

Bereft: funny punch but it's too simple, the setup was almost better than the punch, you set it up so well w/ the saved hundreds on vaca thanks to his nose then the next line was just repeating the same thing, also rhyme scheme was quite lazy imo.

v/ FaQ, just more complex and went for wp/connections, bereft had a gr8 concept but made it wayyy too simple and I always prefer something more complex even if it's a bit choppy than something too obvious

[Lady Poet]

Ber fun and entertaining but not strong enough for the with
I felt like Faq punchline stronger compared to Ber
Vote Faq