RW $350 Final: Virbius vs Jack Hallows III ***VOTE NOW***

[Slayerr.]

@Art any chance you can drop a vote

[Aminal]

My vote goes to Virbius, he stayed attacking instead of self boosting.
The military stance gave virbius alot of ammo and you can really tell on this line.

I’mma kill this ex-marine, and that shit is very suitable,
Coz his Last Post was played out, like a military funeral.

Solid set up and a punchline many could understand with no references.

Jacks verse wasn't bad but was sugar coated with gloss to emphasize on how it would play out-loud.
This actually takes away from your verse in this type of platform. (I used to do this too, until my peers told me to stop.)

The underage punchlines don't do it much after Kendricks a minor phase. It can work but it needs to be much more creative then a Chris Hanson dialogue.


You can tell virbs template is much more natural to the concepts of writing a set up punchline while increasing complexity in between those two points.

Nah forget the anagrams, he gets cucked by his bitch in their camper van and he’s the cameraman but suffers flashbacks of Afghanistan when the attacks began…
When she said she’ll take a bull back (/take Kabul back) Jack snapped and ran coz that shit reminded him of Taliban battle plans.

Jack it's almost like you wrote your verse out of frustration.

u was ‘sposed to die in the 1st round.. how u survived it is absurd..
…… had you dying in the 2nd due to how i postulate with words ..
this 3rd round they’ll say you died, shit i’m just following the curve…
grammatically speaking, this whole series been a master class in how to CONJUGATE A VIRB

Changing ones form in many malicious ways is fine but the self boosting actually took away from it.

It's like hearing good news first then bad news. It cancels each other out.

while your both good writers, I don't think Jack shined this round like the material I've previously viewed of his.

My vote once again goes to Virb for consistency flow and overall template of multis incorporated.

Jack your delivery was well written in the sense of how its displayed but stop letting yourself be distracted by others and most of all yourself.