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    Lifes speed bump

    I remember the day I gave up my fame
    being a prodigy was something I decided to erase
    the phase I went through had a bitter taste

    Being in a world known magazine was a great thing
    at the time I began crying because it brought me pain
    couldnt understand all the glory I was getting

    Got so fed up with all the attention
    I decided to start something that began my addiction
    introduced to pills caused a dent in my emotion
    past two years feels like ive been floating on a ocean
    full of regret, trouble, and constant commotion

    One night ten bars went down my throat
    I dont remember much of it
    but believe me it wasnt intentional
    great night turned to "oh no"
    felt like it was my time to go

    Glad im workin myself back on track
    as a matter a fact all those things I seemed to lack
    were a blessing in disguise
    even though drugs were my life and the things I idolized
    so so many tries and cries

    Realizing now that we got one short life to live
    and past mistakes we did as a kid
    dont mean a thing unless you learn from them

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    Re: Lifes speed bump

    This is very basic in structure and rhyme scheme but the story was ok. If you used more multis and internal rhymes and beef up your vocabulary this might be okay.

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