One - 80 - Falling - second audio

[One80]

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hey guys this is my second track ever, please compare it to my last =) thank you




lyrics

yes i spend alot of time questioning my life
an i guess that my death will be a blessing in disguse
im not a people person theres alot of things i hate
i hate feeling worthless its real and i cant escape
to be honest i never wanted to be different
now these scars on my arms is what i got to live with
my memorys are false an your just a ghost
no hope, and i know it was all my fault
i wont show no emotion just a canvosed blank expression
how can I be myself, when im still dealing with depression
way back then i wrote tracks to show how im feeling
a whole scrapbook of lyrics, trapped in an image
photographs just show the laughs dont show the tears
im torn and broken you stamped on my spirt
an i still remember your slight smile when i cried
cuz that was the day that you walked out of my life


i hate me, i know iv never been a perfect guy
fatal thoughts im facing, contemplating suicide
who am i, because i dont feel like myself
sick of trying so i decided to be someone else
in need of help, my mind is so torn
im so lost in myself i cant fight my own war
my souls in a storm my bodys still rotting
an my best memories are best left forgotten
its a problem when loss is all you've ever known
even when im with someone i will forever be alone
on my own i know i cant control the pain an rage
even black an white blurs into a shade of grey
i need to change an grow but i dont know how
im lost an got tossed to the abyss an thrown around
i cant hold my ground my grip just keeps slipping
its my prison heres my life the one im not living

[DeathChamberz]

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[One80]

sorted it bro

[DeathChamberz]

Recording quality is off and takes aways from enjoyment your projection of voice could improve.
I like your delivery on the beat for the most part it's ver consistent and rides the rhymthm pretty good
Lyrically you are very good rhymes are forced and you know how to do exact rhymes and good loose rhymes

[One80]

yea i will get my quality sorted lol what do you mean by

Lyrically you are very good rhymes are forced and you know how to do exact rhymes and good loose rhymes

do u mean im forcing my rhymes? an whats exact rhymes an loose rhymes lol =/

[One80]

uppin

[Psycho Tick]

the contents good,
truthfully if was me i would turn the beat down a bit so we can make the lyrics out better,
also i think the words would suit a slower beat,
and really slow the tempo down your sad and lonely, let us feel that as if its a struggle to get this out cos of the emotion in it rather than coming with the faster pace which dont reflect its content

[W.isdom I.s L.ife so L.iv]

what do you use when you record?

[One80]

a shure mic dno the name of it, and audacity the vocals always seem off cuz of somin to do with windows 7 delaying the recording an i cant seem to fix it

[DeathChamberz]

yea i will get my quality sorted lol what do you mean by

Lyrically you are very good rhymes are forced and you know how to do exact rhymes and good loose rhymes

do u mean im forcing my rhymes? an whats exact rhymes an loose rhymes lol =/

I meant rhymes aren't forced. Well some rappers are basic and have to make sure thee exact word rhymes. THey have to rhyme cat with bat They don't know how to use pronunciation to make words that don't perfectly rhyme and make them rhyme.

[W.isdom I.s L.ife so L.iv]

check the compatibility of your program and the compatibility of your computer... that could be the reason why it wont work for you

i'm guessing your shure mic is dynamic... you should get a condenser(studio) mic

it could be the voice overs that throw off the song so try this ... record one track(for each verse) with the track playing in both ears..listen to it and see what you think... if you like it but still want to do voice overs record the 1st voice over and have it playing in one (left or right) ear... then record a second voice over and have it playing in the opposite ear of the 1st voice over

offset the volume of the tracks allowing the main track to be a few dbs(decibels) higher than your 1st voice over ... then allow the second voice over to play a few dbs lower than the first voice over... this should give you a more professional sound

[One80]

ohhh thanks deathc,

thanks for the advice mal, yea it is dynamic, i'll look into that mic man, any recommendations? and i'll try doing the recording again when i get time thanks for the feed bro

[W.isdom I.s L.ife so L.iv]

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and here is a usb studio mic if you only want to upgrade that
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[Jawn Raw]

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hit me back please

cool beat, chill vibe.

you have a cool voice but you could deliver it stronger with better pronunciation on your speech. lyrics are decent. also sounds like you are using a shitty computer mic. i see some potential dude, keep dropping tracks and shit.

[Rishi P]

checking this...not really feeling hook way too much autoutne guessing it came with beat tho yeah quality could use work....flow ain't too bad tho for ur 2nd track....some real lyrics good shit....delivery not bad a few slip ups here and there

overall not bad man you def got potential keep dropping and get a new mic

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