Ink Edible (0-0) vs. Soulstice (0-0)

[Noodle]

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3-Way Scoring

1st place: 2 wins
2nd place: 1 win
3rd place: 1 loss

[soulstice.]

glockz up

[Ink Edible]

My bad...my comp messed up on wednesday. I will still drop if you don't care...

[Ink Edible]

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From age 0, what we hear is embedded in our brain
Singing to the radio...to whatever would play
Songs bring back memories of happiness and pain
But then music became another ladder set to fame
...
She/he was "born to sing", it's funny what they say now
Lacking the voice of Sinatra, and the showmanship of James Brown
Copyright Laws ban YouTube videos students create now
Free downloads are bad for the industry...so, use PayPal
or iTunes, or Amazon...Visa is everywhere accepted
When the dollars reach 6 figures, who'd dare to regret it?
Song writers' stories and words go to the Stars' credit
Fans quoting lyrics thinking their favorite artists said it
...
Maybe we were just born to listen, absorb composition
Morals would not be gimmicks if we'd ignore the competition
We'd perform the songs WE'VE written, each sentence
But it's a mean business...when they only mean business
The needles went dull on vinyl, cassettes became tangled, useless
Demos became EPs, there's a money making angle to it
Lyrics became watered down, sales...the main influence
Lowered quality, higher quantity...even MTV stopped playing music
The records turned to gold and platinum...names and product
Pop Stars on melodyne and auto-tune, maintained in Prada
Catchy choruses and instrumentals, but saying nada
The reason we know Stefani Germanotta...as Lady Gaga
Technology has influenced a great part of the scene
iPods and sound systems, to ultimately, another marketing scheme
Concerts become elaborate shows, targeting teens
The glitz and glam overshadow all the garbage we see
Producers are magicians now, complex ventriloquists
Yet we were really pissed when Milly Vanilly slipped
The days when we were kids, music reflected the seasons
Only to find the songs we connected with...
...never had any meanin'

[soulstice.]

*a knock on the door.. Jimothy opens it up and welcomes in the men who stand there*

*ZAPPPPPP rustle rustle scratch*..
sorry, sorry, just trying to keep my shuttle intact
Gotta keep on hustlin' scratch until it functions and blasts...
.. oh, I haven't touched on the fact? See, I've decided I'm not of this planet
So I'm prepping to hop in this cannon and take off with supersonic abandon
An impossible transit? Maybe, I'm sure you think I'm clearly insane
Most people run off before they even get to hearing my name
But your different, your feeling my game - so... see that pile of phones?
Flip that switch, mechanic, I think it's vital to know
If I can rely on those nodes when I'm miles from home
See, thats the engine I'll use when I'm flying through -*groan*
FUCK! It's failed to work, just when I was eyeing my globe
The place I've been dying to go, to blast up past the moon
Since the day I crash landed on the pasture on that drafty afternoon
I'll be up in the galactic rafters soon, this Earth is too sad and blue
Can't wait to get in my craft and zoom - reach space with Spock in my choppa'
Since I've had no luck down here, searching for a Leia Organa
Earth women are pasty or jaundiced - or morbidly structured
Living off jewels and presidents - no sense in courting these fuck-ups
Families aborting their youngin's - what kind of species is this anyway
No survival instinct or value except for feeding the penny tray
And eating their friends away - disgusting "chicken soup"
Each screw's a little loose, I want no part in this twisted group
But with luck I'll be lifted soon - away from this carbon-based moshpit
Where they sell poison and addiction for the hardened race for profit
No love for martyrs, faith, or prophets, just keep your spinal intact
Cause' the circle of life is linked by knives in the back
No kindness - in fact, I've been searching for beacons of hope
A chance for me to stay but there's no reason to probe
It keeps getting bleaker, you know.. it's come to wars hidden in mystery
Brother against brother for the sake of what's written in history
It's sickening - my species can't be like the homosapiens
Never welcoming a brother - they're prone to start enslaving them
& if you can't pay the rent - don't expect hospitality
All this gravity, yet the trickle-down theory is a travesty
A tragedy - treating men like aliens like yours truly
Abhor each one to the core, like your on all fours, drooling
A storms brewing - gotta hurry, gotta get my ass on spaceships
I'm chased by the people that took my paycheck to imaginary places
Quick, the cabinet, theres some papers - diagrams of my engine
& the A9 rocket fluid, and it's standard conventions
All of my plan and invention - to escape and join my own species
Rejoice in their world peace while Earthlings rejoice in their feces
We're like we were conjoined at the fetus - unlike this asinine hell
So if you need me tomorrow just head towards the asteroid belt
I'm joyous, you tell? - wait, is that a gun, what.. is something up??
*Jimothy Daxter, I'm Agent Zed, and your coming with us*

*.. but I was so close*

[_Lyrics]

Ink Edible- hmm straight foward piece, a good outlook on the status of the ruthless industry and a lot of outrageous shit in that verse that'd raise a brow, flow had a lot of multis and the wording was smooth the whole time... content wise i honestly wasnt feeling the first verse, , but the other verses were getting more deep in the mess its tangling itself upon the kids thus connecting to the picture in a metaphorical perspective.. wasn't sure how to take the last bar though, but overall the piece was nice. and had a real controversial feel to it too. good shit

Soulstice- umm the story was really fast paced, especially for a long written feels like i zoomed through, well the flow was good, but i think some of the wording could've used another look over.. the concept was weird haha i can picture a crazy cat telling a mechanic to help him build his space ship, shit was weird though that agent zed got him, shouldn't have fucked with the universal galactic government i guess?. lol i liked the penny tray line and brother against brother lines the best.. anyways it was a creative piece

well both pieces were cool, but I think Ink had more appeal to me personally, a better take on his topic and it was actually in the thread lol
v/Ink Edible

edit heh yeah it was my bad

[soulstice.]

the topic was escape artist which was in the thread?
and fuckin agent zed was supposed tobe an FBI agent
oh well thanks for voting

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[soulstice.]

voted on 5 battles, yet one vote on mine? smh...

[SMZ]

ink - good piece - stuck to ur topic consistently and developed ur point, rhymes were sound... i noticed the pacing was off every so often, but otherwise pretty solid fare and a well done closer

soulstice - when i started ur piece i thought ink had this in the bag because the opening was a lil abrupt and shaky... but the piece got strong quick and this is a difficult choice now... i did not like the 'groan' rhyme but the second half of ur piece especially had a number of nicely worded lines - i think it was a creative take and liked ur closing with the touch of humor as well... the whole piece had a slightly eccentric feel which was nice with it coming from an alien viewpoint...

hmmm.... this is difficult for me to pick - closest one i looked at so far - gonna reread...

i'm sayin v/ Ink because the beginning of soulstice piece felt weaker to me

[Tim]

Ink- Very sold piece from you, I dont know where the fuck you have been hiding, but glad to have read your work. First piece i have ever read from you and from your opinion of my verse i was like who the hell does this yim yam think he is lol. Well i really liked the approach you took on the topic, fluent rhymes, and very detail oriented take of the music industry today.

Producers are magicians now, complex ventriloquists

Really thought this line here was dope

Soul- Welcome back been awhile since ive seen you on the boards, but glad to see you back non the less. Your verse was good also liked how the story started and transitioned from line to line. The only thing i really didnt like about it was the ending. I felt like it might ened a lil to short for me. I felt myself wanting a lilttle bit more, but still it was a good piece.

Both of you had good work but i am going to...

Vote.....Ink

I just felt the message in his piece more

[Brandon Cee]

thank you guys for voting.

Ink wins (1-0)
Soul loses (0-1)

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