I'm Looking for real Help.

[Damz]

Ok, Lately. I've been dropping stupid.
And some new kids be hating. And vets don't Recognize.
And I strive for excellence. but Everything I drop people dislike.

I'm looking to become a very good writer.
And I want help. Like hard hitting help.

Tell me everything I can improve on.

This hood can't be no deeper, the good is only evil,
It results to' desert eagles, The .45 be so lethal,
The heat cannot blow up, Only if the gunner does,
The world just doesn't know, Black kicks, red flag,
That is what a gunner does, Long clips, an live frags,

[Hiponics]

Whuddup man, Well its hard to tell from text rap's but flow is very important. As far as lyrics. try stepping away from the sterotypical topics. Hood life, Guns, yadda yadda. Give your brain a excersice. Write about a magical world your invision in your dreams, be as descriptive as possible, Work on metaphores, Punchlines. AND MOST IMPORTANT!!!! WRITE EVERYDAY. I been doing rap for almost 10 years now and the best advice i can give is write everyday. Just keep at it. When i was 16 I wasnt the greatest but now since i kept with it im doing alright.

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