Freestyle

[KID L]

Ahem

Murderous, got away with murder ,same way as Oj

Sqeezed the truth outta many with sumthin like gunplay

Wordplay but i dont play with it, kid no more,I aged

With verbs to mix in with reverb and adverbs to curve

lyrics to a system locked within these bars, make em superb

And i dont need how to's, im wit Lu, my wits is so sick

I caught the flu cuz i was so High tried to plant my feet so they wouldnt move,but they didnt stick so i tried my infamous glue

Glued my hands to ma needles and started to bleed out the truth

Truth is i never really was the gangsta type nor cool in school

Never got along with others ,damn sure didnt follow the rules

Always had enemies, all my life I was called a fool

Did i tell you i was never a gangsta?

Damn right, cuz i only carried a pad a needles as ma tools


lol...god im rusty

[KID L]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=399854
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...nk-399845.html

[Soul Slayer]

This was average my dude..... Yes. you are rusty but what makes it worse is the fact that you are dwelling on self glory rather than a progressive concept. I personal have had it with all this type of pieces on RB... Try something fresh my good sir or just write to a certain topic... That way you can have a storyline and all which enhances the piece.

[HYPOKRIT]

The flow was the only thing that seemd on point to me here. The rhymes were average and multi's no where to be seen.

I agree with that guy above to a point. If your gonna rap to the aim of self gloryification i dont mind that but it better be good and this wasnt. Sorry.

What with the needles thing you a junkie?

[HYPOKRIT]

The flow was the only thing that seemd on point to me here. The rhymes were average and multi's no where to be seen.

I agree with that guy above to a point. If your gonna rap to the aim of self gloryification i dont mind that but it better be good and this wasnt. Sorry.

What with the needles thing you a junkie?

[HYPOKRIT]

The flow was the only thing that seemd on point to me here. The rhymes were average and multi's no where to be seen.

I agree with that guy above to a point. If your gonna rap to the aim of self gloryification i dont mind that but it better be good and this wasnt. Sorry.

What with the needles thing you a junkie?

[KID L]

needles=pen ....no im no junkie but yeah ok?

[DressToKill]

Yeah man, clearly your rusty. I would personal sick to the AA/BB/CC rhymescheme and just work your wack up to complexity. It just gives you a good base structure instead of random rhyming words everywhere, but dont be afraid to add internal's as well. Keep at it.

[Xistence]

man this was extremely rushed even for a freestyle the flow was good tho and thats about it nothing really special but it seemed to fall off as it went on not gonna try and degrade you but you should shake the dust off a little in the cyphers then come back here... but yo it was average nothing special.... but keep elevatin...
rtf please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...en-400283.html