tHUGZ pRAYER

[IstabMidgets]

now i lay me down to sleep
2 loaded clips at my feet
if i should die before i wake
lord strike down that fuckin snake
6 feet deep and 5 pounds bigger
full of lead from my trigger
as my laughter fills the night
my souls at rest i won this fight

Everyday we hustle and pull clips on cats
sometimes its chains and baseball bats
sleep with one eye open 2 guns in the bed
one at my side and one under my head
everynight the same thing hope and pray for a new day
but who do i ask what the fuck would you say
when you live a life of sin its hard to ask for forgiveness
i kill at will and still i dont think of my sentence
the burden that i bear cuts deep in my soul
no longer have a heart all thats left is coal
so whether im free, runnin, or locked in a cell
i know in the end ill be burning in hell
ive accepted that fact and thats why im so dangerous
why blastin ya whole family is no big thang for us
we reppin 314 even in that six six six
so fuck you lord you can suck all our dicks
i dont need you ive been alone this whole time
all i needs the crew and a clip for the tech nine
what would jesus do ? nothing you should worry about this boy
cuz i control your life with the clip of my big toy

now i lay me down to sleep
2 loaded clips at my feet
if i should die before i wake
lord strike down that fuckin snake
6 feet deep and 5 pounds bigger
full of lead from my trigger
as my laughter fills the night
my souls at rest i won this fight

so its happened ive been gunned down in violence
i can see my family sitting in silence
how could this happen he was so young
1 bullet in the head and 1 in the lung
bitches rollin up kissin my forehead
everybody cryin "why is my boy dead"
its not fair he didnt deserve to be hunted
but in all honesty this is what i wanted
see to those of you who dont understand
this hustlin life is just living mouth to hand
its not glamorous nobody shows you the truth
the only reason these rappers is rich is from hittin the booth
you think before they went platnium they drove rolls royces
that aint drug money trick its all from the voices
now i wander the earth an anonymous lost soul
when people hear my name they say remember that ass hole
i can see and hear but there is nothing i can do
just remember when you talk about me im wating for you

now i lay me down to sleep
2 loaded clips at my feet
if i should die before i wake
lord strike down that fuckin snake
6 feet deep and 5 pounds bigger
full of lead from my trigger
as my laughter fills the night
my souls at rest i won this fight

( a couple of good flows can be found here\/)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post7080994

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...on-399931.html

[Chrit.]

this was way too cliche to me...
just a bunch of gun talk and such...

Its not bad for what it is... sometimes too simple on the rhyme scheme... but not horrible.

keep writing... and broaden out to other topics

[IstabMidgets]

thanks for the feedback its been a long time since ive really written anything and im just throwing a few out there to get a feel for it again ya dig? once i get back in that state of mind they should start improving

[DressToKill]

This isn't anything to special lyrically, average at best. I would suggest getting original with your topic somehow or just writing about something more important, this has been done over again and again. You have a lot of potential, you got structure down and you can write decently, just need to freshen shit up a bit.