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Thread: A Bleeding Earth

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    A Bleeding Earth

    The ice bergs are fading, at incredible speed,
    But pollution rises, consumed by you an me,
    We must stop and breath, start thinking of relief,
    To save our grandkids of the horrible things we feed.

    I think this world needs to grow up and act their age,
    Quit complaining about mistakes made to get paid,
    Jeopardizing this earth, for transportations played,
    We see effects everyday, but refuse to face the facts,
    That the day after tomorrows, comfortably on track,
    But this generations economy is fragile so pushed back,
    Priorities the money, till the eye of the storm attacks,
    Than suddenly the notorious impact, leaves cracks,
    And the devastation caused, request for income tax,
    To compensate the devastation placed in peoples fate,
    But this aint, the worst case scenario in place,
    If this global warming continues, it’ll be extinction of human race.

    The ice bergs are fading, at incredible speed,
    But pollution rises, consumed by you an me,
    We must stop and breath, start thinking of relief,
    To save our grandkids of the horrible things we feed.

    The things we take for granted, green ground and blue sky,
    The plantation, and species of animals eaten to survive,
    Stand to loose their life, erased, completely wiped,
    But it’s a small price to pay, a sacrifice well made,
    In the eyes of the politician, with money as his pride,
    Feeding the public bullshit, feeding faulty advice,
    Saying global warming’s a myth, that this planets alright,
    Its never been healthier, continue turning on your lights,
    And invites people, to exercise their human rights,
    For once before the controversy sparks and ignites,
    And his career is crippled by this atmospheres dying life.

    The ice bergs are fading, at incredible speed,
    But pollution rises, consumed by you an me,
    We must stop and breath, start thinking of relief,
    To save our grandkids of the horrible things we feed.

    Alright im being serious, talking straight to the world,
    This worlds the last we get, so take care and protect,
    Theres are nation wide shortage of water so respect,
    The fact that where blessed, with a resource, that keeps life in check,
    Where a pain in the neck, to the defense of this system,
    It gives more than its got, but the human race keeps winging,
    And hinging drills to the ground to harvest oils like binge drinking,
    We need to wake up and start fucking thinking.

    The ice bergs are fading, at incredible speed,
    But pollution rises, consumed by you an me,
    We must stop and breath, start thinking of relief,
    To save our grandkids of the horrible things we feed.


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    Re: A Bleeding Earth

    I liked this drop. Its good to hear someone rapping on a topic not normally rapped about. It was creative and had a good flow. I say as as long as as you add some more multis and some strong metaphors, you'll soon be one of the stronger spittahs on this board.

    7/10.

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    Thanks man, appreciate it.

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    The Idea of this topic was good man..Though I feel you could have put a lot more work into it. Don't get me wrong it was semi creative and had a lot of potential. Though I feel your wording was off a lot in places..which really made it impossible to create a flow..which is annoying while reading a verse....Your emotion was deffinitley felt..Though you didnt really attack anything to great...you didnt really portray FALSE facts..which is a good thing...though iw ould have loved to see you address a topic indepthly...but overall it was a well thought out piece...just try and work on your flow and u should be fine bro...7/10


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    Cheers man, yea i was planning to go into depth, but i also wanted to cover the topic as a whole, so i thought that was the better way to go but the feedback is appreciated

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    Come on, leave us some feed please

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    It was a gud one, infact choosin this type of topic really must be appreciated as ritin a proper flow for it isnt so easy....bout rhymes, almost perfect but smwhere in between i felt tht i m loosin ma concentration so try to keep it tight by addin som gud metaphors nd all. overall its gud.

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    cheers man, keep feed coming

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    Re: A Bleeding Earth

    Quote Originally Posted by Sick. View Post
    The Idea of this topic was good man..Though I feel you could have put a lot more work into it. Don't get me wrong it was semi creative and had a lot of potential. Though I feel your wording was off a lot in places..which really made it impossible to create a flow..which is annoying while reading a verse....Your emotion was deffinitley felt..Though you didnt really attack anything to great...you didnt really portray FALSE facts..which is a good thing...though iw ould have loved to see you address a topic indepthly...but overall it was a well thought out piece...just try and work on your flow and u should be fine bro...7/10


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    yeah man i fel the emotions so much it was indescribable id rate this actually an 8 cause it was a potential piecer eal raw emotiooons and not false facts

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    cheers for the feedback man, keep it comin

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