Rent - Testimony of a Stick up kid

[Diversed]

Alright y'all weather y'all wan't to decided weather on not this is fiction is up to y'all, but this is my keystyle using pictures, just trying something new.



See I'll rob ya blind, in the sense
that you didn't see it coming.....
blind sighted, hence the reason
why y'all didn't seem to be running
Ha! ya pulse was running fluid like
a kitchen sink before I griped the
groves of my woodgrain pistol Now ya
making moves and with no time to think
and father time won't dare spare a
beggar no change So then I snatch
a fistfull of JFk's
and if you
attemp to struggles then out comes the slugs
and wilterd flowers I will lay across ya
concerate grave, today a demon got paid
and you got laid out. made out to be a
victim of mugging; Man! that shit is played
out, but for now I'll fade out under the cloak
of the night, Hopping that might someone
will be as ignorant as you to walk down these alleys;

[MC_Merkstyla]

it was cool to see a picture flow...

See I'll rob ya blind, in the sense
that you didn't see it coming.....
blind sighted, hence the reason
why y'all didn't seem to be running
^^ cool opening

the way some of the rest was written threw me off a little but i tried to make it all flow... thanks for making an interesting read, i never saw the picture thing much til i got here. it's pretty smooth. keep elevating

[Bounce]

read like a quick key freestyle. Nothing for me to critique here since it wasn't meant to be a real deep or serious piece. I though the flow was choppy, and content kind of lacking. but then again a freestyle is a freestyle so it's a no issue

[NiNjah Red]

yes a pretty interesting piece in certain aspects i like the way you described certain things, woodgrain pistol was cool..........
yeah was an original approach at some otherwise gangsta type ish. . the flow could be a bit more organized i guess, or perhaps the delivery of bars, but then i guess you posted like that to have a nice format


keep it up

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