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Thread: Good Night

  1. August 15th, 2006, 07:03 PM #1
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    Good Night

    Eyes rolled back
    In a lifeless state
    Seeing images of fate
    Life in a glass house
    Echoes through the halls
    Tears run down my skin
    I'm haunted by many
    Sounds assunder
    Whispers muted dull
    Rivers of blood pass
    My eyes fixed upon
    The figure in the shade
    Moonlit paths
    Impossible to cross
    Jumping is difficult
    No escape fathomable
    Life is not a game
    Why treat is as such?
    Deep within my mind
    I run scared of thoughts
    Terrified I gasped
    No one there to help
    Slowly I move
    As it darkens near me
    Again I gasped
    Light shown in
    None of this is real
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  2. August 15th, 2006, 07:10 PM #2
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...wpost&t=305472
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  3. August 15th, 2006, 07:22 PM #3
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    uppin this for feed thanks
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  4. August 15th, 2006, 11:40 PM #4
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    you dont need links in this forum.

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  5. August 16th, 2006, 07:15 AM #5
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    Oh well I am used to it....
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  6. August 16th, 2006, 07:35 AM #6
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    this was interesting...got me thinking and was real nice aswell...somewhat basic in a way man...but in another way it seemed nicely done and the content and thought of perscice of emotion was nice, had a nice execution.

    Echoes through the halls
    Tears run down my skin
    I'm haunted by many
    Sounds assunder
    Whispers muted dull
    Rivers of blood pass
    My eyes fixed upon
    The figure in the shade
    Moonlit paths
    Impossible to cross
    Jumping is difficult
    No escape fathomable
    Life is not a game
    Why treat is as such?
    ^^
    this i liked here had content and a sense of feel...nicely done man.

    now RTF on my omega account...vail of dreams
    I Solomnly swear to heavens above
    Thou shall not fear no evil, and shead its love!




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  7. August 16th, 2006, 07:54 AM #7
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    WEll this was aight, i liked the fact that this didn't have awkardness and had the fulidit between the connections of each line as i like that in a piece it makes it much more enjoyable. I found this simplicit yet not without shining gems that were covered in dirt waiting to be found. Don't get me wrong, this was good but certain lines were on a different level than some of the others.
    Overall, i liked this, nice piece and an easy and enjoyable read.
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  8. August 16th, 2006, 07:57 AM #8
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    Was a decent piece....vocab was good it had a good content...the emotion was good like omega said there was some sense of it being basic in places but it was good...Thanks for the read...Kepp up.
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