You switched the point of view from second to third at points. I don't know if you meant to do this on purpose or not. If you did, then I can see how a speaker in that situation would switch pov's under stress, and not being the most articulate at that moment, giving the eulogy. Even if you didn't mean to do that, I suppose you can say you did. There were exact memories that were described, makes it more personal. Structure was alright, run this through spell-check to make it more presentable.
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