Thank You .

[CrazyCarl]

You switched the point of view from second to third at points. I don't know if you meant to do this on purpose or not. If you did, then I can see how a speaker in that situation would switch pov's under stress, and not being the most articulate at that moment, giving the eulogy. Even if you didn't mean to do that, I suppose you can say you did. There were exact memories that were described, makes it more personal. Structure was alright, run this through spell-check to make it more presentable.
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[Ether Spitter]

love thas real...to a love lost....man ya piece was felt...and its hard to think that if this was a real event...that you had to go thru this....im sorry man...this was a heartfelt...no doubt....the flow was coo...delivery in parts was kinda shaky....but the end itself was the hardest hitting...this was a coo piece

igido

[Take Over]

thanks bro shot

[Take Over]

1 more up of this n its done with.