i'll holla at you later im bout to log off
i'll holla at you later im bout to log off
Jay One
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vote on my battles
Murked since my return
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im gon check it out, but n-e ways i g2g i've got school and shit 2morrow but if ya want to tlk sum otha time just private message me aightt. holla at me l8ter man..
Yo this drop was aight, you're structure was fucked up and made me loose interest.....You could have drew pictures for me and gave me a feeling of what you was feeling at the moment, keep working ma
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thnks jay he would it work if i just video taped tha whole thing first verse from last verse tha real ppl and shit with me dis shit would be ghetto.. as hell funn tho..
more feedback plz...
your structure needs to be worked on, but you had a good point, it was interesting to me. but i felt i was reading more of a story than a poem, but htis was creative and interesting to me. had ok vocab but you dint use high level words. this wasn't too bad, just need to work in some angles
thnks
mo feed bck plz...
cum on i know i did good....
i liked it baby. just work on the structure but i feel u. +=NICE=+
im tryna to work on my work k, give ya gurl some time
K BABE it's cool
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this was tight keep up the good work
Thnks youngprophet2
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