kautious vs whippingwillow

[Chemarim]

10 lines
dues 30 minutes after both checkin

no biting - recycling - feeding
or get disqualified :stupid2:

no crew votes :scared:

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[whippingwillow]

im checking in spit you got half hour first to five wins

[whippingwillow]

now this motha fucka wanna battle me
5 minutes ago he was sucking dick on his knees

now hes battiling hes doesnt know where to go
just like a fat ho he took it in the weong whole

who the fuck gave you the name kautious
too bd your stinch is making me nautious

what did you think was gonna happen when we battle
its a long ways back to africa so get in your boat and start to paddle

im sorry it only took me 10 lines to wreck you
the encamped jews last longer then you do

[whippingwillow]

you are almost out of time bitch hurry up did my rhymes hurt you that much that you felt it in the gut

[Chemarim]

This boy don't think i know he 'textile', whipping willow keep quilting
a sewing needle stay strong wit women, when you in presence yea manhood be wilting
he ain't the first to 'sea a billow' cuz las time i took a piss outside... im pretty sure it was on willow
So i'll step back an let the boy get back, recline an smash his head on brick stacks
he was running at murda like italians, it aint my fault he wanted quick wacks
cut his spine out an take a vertebrae, make sure he can't stand no more vertic-lay
I got a cache of weapons to make you sway, c4 on yea head today concealed with clay
detonate the switch by tommorow, so in time i won't feel 24 hours of fucking sorrow

[Chemarim]

uppin dis
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[openminded]

if i could vote i vote kautious hes shit was more complex and better written
whippingwillow was just to simple for me.
i vote kautious.

[Chemarim]

upping for poll votes plzz...............................

[Dirty South]

Willow

what did you think was gonna happen when we battle
its a long ways back to africa so get in your boat and start to paddle

im sorry it only took me 10 lines to wreck you
the encamped jews last longer then you do

Dude, LOL, these were the only lines that rhymed, nothing complexed,and no punches that hit hard. This verse was a 0.5/10 at best. You need to practice more. Try to find a point that you can pick on about your opponet (ex. where hes from, things hes said in previous post)

Kautious

I got a cache of weapons to make you sway, c4 on yea head today concealed with clay
detonate the switch by tommorow, so in time i won't feel 24 hours of fucking sorrow

your verse started off really shakey but it got betta as it when on and I feel you ended the battle decently, these two lines were the strongest in your verse, although it was decent it wasnt anything special

Overall, both need to elevate, Kautious you're on the right track. Try an reword some of the things you say and you wouldn't have that much more to work on

VOTE-Kautious

[Chemarim]

I NEED THESE ON A POLL!
uppin .....................

[Chemarim]

uppin this to finsih it plz!
drop a link an i'll hit it back

[Dymensionz]

like they said before kautious was more complex and better written....

willow was ok but needs work on you word play.......

[Chemarim]

uppin this to get finished