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    ...:::Scorched Earth:::...



    hi Human . . .

    modern expansion, the mission is build and destroy
    wielding a pen. sacrifice land to make yield and deploy
    consume the resources, employ the heard to the turf
    put shovels to dirt, machines rip the flesh from the earth
    once the surface is clear, burry the pipelines
    profits lining your pockets, there’s green in them pines
    industrial lines, re-skinning her soil with streets
    let her sleep, as you pump oil from under the sheets
    chemicals leak into oceans, streams, rivers, & creeks
    falling like tears flowing from the base of her cheeks
    until one day. Mother awakes from her sleep
    tremors shake the asphalt, the foundations are weak
    cities crumble, the ground rumbles under your feet
    tsunami’s cover your towns, the cancer retreats
    stitching her wounds with the bones from our dead
    what’d you expect?
    you’re the ones that put the gun to her head

    . . . bye Human


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    Re: ...:::Scorched Earth:::...

    This was cool. Short and sweet. Did kinda feel like the length hurt it a bit as the ending almost felt abrupt but that's my only nitpickity complaint. The writing as always was spot on and it flowed nicely. Seemed like you just wanted to write and I def respect and relate to that. Good shit man. We gotta collab soon.

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    You've earned a custom title! Cody Nash's Avatar
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    Re: ...:::Scorched Earth:::...

    Definitely short and to the point! Would’ve liked to read more of your thoughts on the topic cause it’s a pretty talked about subject with technology and humans shitting on Mother Earth and all, but you also kept the bars creative and the flow of the reading was on point. I do enjoy reading your work and find myself clicking right away when I see you post though. Not a lot to say on this one other than I liked the verse and you kept it tight. Not to compare your writtens to each other, but I did like your Tin Man one more than this. Keep ‘em coming! Digging the activity.

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