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    “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    ahem,

    every .. letter.



    What is it good for?



    yo,


    To shape a civilization - man vs. wild, the industrial
    turkey in a perfect little pile in your lunchable,
    highly combustable, clouds that narrow a windpipe
    soliders fight in tuxedos lined with heroin pinstripes -
    the American midnight - Rocket power, Reggie in dimebags
    Squids washed upon the riverbanks for chemical finance,
    intersectional bypass - blacktop, paint in a dotted line
    directs whiplashing cars filled with slaves to the dollar sign -
    we placed a trojan horse inside the basement of columbine,
    watched a murder crawl out and framed hatred for homicide.
    but hatred is authorized .. it's a volatile weapon,
    always changing it's structure, endless model selection:
    there's hostile aggression, bitterness, shame & regret ,
    isolation, neglect; or double barrel aimed at your neck -
    racism, tension, pent-up rage is repressed,
    and we wonder why the Middle East invaded the West ..
    Major, Lieutenant, Sargent, Captain, or King
    puppets captured in a web, the Black tarantula's string -
    the Sopranos will sing an ode to mafia ties,
    notes bloodthirsty enough to cause Gaddafi to rise.
    while our audience cries, it's time for curtains to fall
    9/11 was the first and last emergency call..
    begging God to grant serenity and mercy to all -
    alas, Berlin is not the only great, impervious wall.
    Our purpose is scrawled in constellational patterns,
    so fortune telling is the only occupation that matters..
    that tug-of-war that comes with conversational chatter,
    is what keeps the better part of populations in taverns.
    conservation, disaster - mirrored shadows on a carpeted floor
    war is art, art is beauty, beauty started the war.
    Death departed the morgue in search of Heavenly bliss,
    became a Livestrong band around Destiny's wrist.
    Marine Corpses camouflaged behind intestinal rips,
    signed their souls to the Devil & He let 'em enlist.
    while physicists are on a mission for dimensional shifts,
    we fight to capture back those precious seconds we missed..
    the future's bright, the past is glorified, the present's a bitch -
    in this war, the draft's a process we could never resist.

    take a second to listen - this aint an anthem for peace,
    broken eggs can make an omelet, Death can fashion a feast.
    Food for thought - war is more than troops attacking in fleets,
    cuz there's a battle beneath the North Face logo stamped to your fleece.
    we've mobilized an army of compassionate beasts,
    expressing hatred for their enemies with passive beliefs.
    the chasm is deep - our cycle seems deliciously wretched,
    sometimes ethics & survival hold a different perspective.

    it's pitiful trenches, dinner selections, first-string vs. secondaries
    WAR - they ask what is it good for?
    and I answer: absolutely .. necessary.




    “We make war that we may live in peace.”

    - Aristotle



    - Black
    I'm here to break my own ball and chain..

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    yea.. following suit

    read / feed if you so desire. i'll be returning links / getting my 2 initial links up tonight after work

    church
    I'm here to break my own ball and chain..

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    woah...

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    Fucking hell

    archive this instantly

    greatest thing i've read in a while

    this needs recording

    seriously

    wow

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    Major, Lieutenant, Sargent, Captain, or King
    puppets captured in a web, the Black tarantula's string -
    the Sopranos will sing an ode to mafia ties,
    notes bloodthirsty enough to cause Gaddafi to rise.
    while our audience cries, it's time for curtains to fall
    9/11 was the first and last emergency call..


    FIRE MAN!

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    Blacketh, this was a fucking amazing piece bro. Though I've seen you take similar concepts before. I feel like this may have easily been your greatest approach on it yet. The wording in this entire piece was fucking fantastic...

    there's hostile aggression, bitterness, shame & regret ,
    isolation, neglect; or double barrel aimed at your neck
    -

    Major, Lieutenant, Sargent, Captain, or King
    puppets captured in a web, the Black tarantula's string
    -

    conservation, disaster - mirrored shadows on a carpeted floor
    war is art, art is beauty, beauty started the war
    .

    the chasm is deep - our cycle seems deliciously wretched,
    sometimes ethics & survival hold a different perspective
    .

    Easily some of the best writing I've seen on this site, or any forum I've posted on for that matter sir. The rhyme scheme you used seemed so clean and balance. It's as if you spent half an hour editing every bar to it's perfection. As I read, the pace rolled off my tongue quicker and quicker. It was just sooooo smooth. I can't explain it. By the end of this piece, I wanted to revoke a lot of the shit I've said to you in recent months. Reminded me that I'll never be THIS good. Awesome read bud.

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    Damn Black, this was a great piece. This flowed incredibly well and your rhyme scheme was very impressive. The multis and internals littered throughout helped assemble the flow and made it an even better read. Put the rhyme scheme aside and I look at the wording of this piece, 90 percent of the word choices made me think damn, how does he pick the perfect words in the perfect spots. The rhyme scheme, wording and content made this an incredibly intriguing read, you were very creative conceptually, very good direction to come out of the picture, never in a million years would I have thought to connect a fucked up picture like this to a piece about war and peace. Very well written, Black, you made it worth the wait and every bit deserving of the finale.

    I have nominated this for hall of fame.


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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    Sorry, double post.
    Last edited by trajik; November 8th, 2011 at 11:27 PM
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    Our purpose is scrawled in constellational patterns,
    so fortune telling is the only occupation that matters..
    amazing how this line evokes the different perspectives you can relate war to, i like how you ended up not really using war as just a metaphor for love or a certain struggle, but to how we think

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    Black....sup homie....

    nice drop..flawless if I do say so myself
    the flow was nice, the concept itself is siiiiiiiick
    especially the way you flip it...it was consistent
    and you painted a niiiiiice picture...nice drop my dude
    keep it up
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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre....html?t=462224


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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    Flow-check
    imagery-check
    abstract message- check
    demonstration of a vast vocabulary-check


    congrats on the win with this piece it was really put together nicely.

    we placed a trojan horse inside the basement of columbine,
    watched a murder crawl out and framed hatred for homicide.


    It doesnt get any better than that man.

    it's pitiful trenches, dinner selections, first-string vs. secondaries
    WAR - they ask what is it good for?
    and I answer: absolutely .. necessary.


    i think wat it is that sets you apart from most is your opener and your closer. I can always count on something that sets the piece off great with a chilling thought implanted in your mind at the end. Again congrats and look forward to more

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    Our purpose is scrawled in constellational patterns,
    so fortune telling is the only occupation that matters..

    ^ Fucking Epic

    I had to read that a few times like wow, the rhymes are flawless and the words fit almost perfectly, and this was throughout the piece, absolutely amazing... and it also gives you something to think about, dope read bro..

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    C'mon you know the rules...I need to see 3 links sir.

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    Re: “Heroin Pinstripes” [War]

    your wordplay is good, the flow was nice, the multis were nice. this whole piece was definitely worth the read. i'd do like Baron Mynd said and record this, its a overall dope drop. soild from start to finish.

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