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    September Stories

    September Stories
    by Westcoast

    (A little late on the date… But we’re still in September)



    "In the City of God there will be a great thunder, Two brothers torn apart by Chaos, while the fortress endures, the great leader will succumb",
    The third big war will begin when the big city is burning"
    Nostradamus 1654

    As stated above may just be the truth, maybe, thank Nostradomus
    But we all know it’s proven over time that tomorrow’s not promised
    As sad as it seems, you never see death let’s be honest…
    We are twins, he was my brother, and I am also his brother
    Together a smoke sheet is and will be our final cover
    Inside is his lover, married and a child to be discovered
    The people dead, as are we, but the stories will always hover


    September 11th 2001

    8:46 A.M. Eastern Time
    A normal flight intention, then on the loud speaker you hear ATTENTION!
    Couldn’t understand, it was Arabic, the plane sped up but it built tension
    Opposite of Jesus’ ascension, life passes by and you see your retentions
    Eyes flashed and a spark of light, and after a big bang they were in a new dimension
    People scream for a hope, a light, a way out, and the ignorance struck about the end
    Nothing can amend the fact of the descend, a Father whispers to his son, “Just pretend…”
    Look at enemies as their friends, America extends, the ying sends yang and they blend
    One final call in tears saying “Honey, I don’t think we’ll ever see each other again…”

    BOOM!

    My plane just ran into a metal wall
    It stalled, but I got to stand strong and tall
    Time to grow up rather then grow tall
    And tell myself what Jesus said…
    “Thou shall not fall”


    The Missed Phone Call...

    BEEP!
    “Hey things seem so downward, Earth kicked me out the door
    Don’t forget before, but now I’m going to die and it’s not my choice anymore
    So I’ll miss you, so remember my voice and stay strong during war
    I want you to live happy and explore, and I wish I could see you, I adore
    I want to yell, he me roar, till my brain is sore, and my blood stopped its pour
    Sadly my body will beat the plane to the floor, but I won’t crash I’ll soar
    Unlike the plane, anyways I love you till I die, and that was from the core”
    A sigh, sniff and breaks out into tears, a last cry, only if you could see in his eyes
    “All that reapplies, and I wish I had the time to wait for your reply but I’ll try
    The plane is still high, so look through the smoke and I’ll be in the sky
    Please don’t deny it, I’m bound to die, so tell the kids too… Good bye.”
    …End…

    You can tell the story just hearing the tone
    Mood: as hard as a stone, tingling the bone
    Looking at the door, hoping he'll come home
    Wish you weren't alone looking at the tomb stone
    For every negative is there a positive, not on your own
    A moan and groan, now Daddy won't ever see you grown
    A body is a loan to your soul so ignore him being prone
    Or atleast that's whats shown, all cuz he flown
    Life was on postpone, looking at the pictures and see the unknown...


    Plane Pain Part II
    9:03 A.M. Eastern Time
    Sitting there with a slight warning on an airplane, flight one seventy five
    The television shown it live, our plane was next and we were taking a dive
    The thought struck fear, our mind speaks, “We just need to try to survive”
    Please thrive and strive to inhale the accepted pain that will soon arrive
    Need some drive, open up the wallet and it was staring at me, it was my family
    Top of lungs sore screaming “God… please forgive… God damned me”
    No response, we’re still dropping, “GOD!” but he don’t understand me
    Plane one hit a home run and a splatter, and now we’re the next batter
    Cause more than glass to shatter, more than just people to scatter
    Look at the bad past, life leaving but forget it, none of the past matters
    Look down and see the world coming closer, seeing the world trading
    Who was I? A nobody and the only thing different was having life fading
    Growing impatient, tired of waiting, and how bad it was having God hating
    A blast, everything broken even the grating, blood shown through my skin plating
    I never had someone so close relating what I was debating
    But now it’s gotten real cold, now we’re on the same ice… Skating

    Monotone…

    Prayers keep your devotion, but is God our healing potion?
    No matter what happens, we’re still stuck with our emotion
    And things are so tight, the last few hours will be in slow motion…


    Terror In Them
    A video of Osama showing his exist, he was behind the abyss
    Having families amiss and force people to remiss and reminisce
    Opposite of bliss or so Bin Laden insists giving that sick twist
    Osama dementedly laughed and made an anti-american takeover list
    Clenched and pissed, America curled and fought making a fist
    Sorrow became anger in a blind mist; the towers were a finger to the wrist
    But he said “that won’t stop me” and that’s when the video grew choppy
    Shown clips of him leading a pack but sloppy of living bombs, kamikazes

    The president to address the actions the finesse how the pilots are possessed
    Bush was on talking assess, well he hit no success, causing distress
    Time to confess, our lives within minutes was a mess, causing stress
    Can’t believe the press, America’s bad move strategically in global chess
    Lives were ending or seemed posing; the pages flip the book was closing
    Burnt and decomposing, didn’t have time for the chapters of proposing
    Now enclosing, and so many rumors and talk seeping in and America’s exposing

    Emerged Empties
    Empty souled, but full of sin, and all cut up deep inside and my skin
    The first time the plane took a win and knocked out the tower’s chin
    A grin? No, but a bad spin on the curveball taking out America’s shin
    Life’s starting to begin all within the mind which is growing thin
    Ears ringing, now people are has beens, and stuck on the final note of the violin
    And damn it there is no more twin, I want things how they use to have been
    When we were smiling, and now all we have to look back is some metal pin

    Years later don’t want to relive it, but the back flash
    A low noise and crash, collision and a bash
    Call 9-1-1 and watch them dash, heal the smash
    This was a tidal wave compared to a slight splash
    A gash compared to a paper cut or an itch to a rash
    The building and people are gone, all left is the ash


    The Bird’s View
    Fires ablaze and all hell, total destruction in raise
    Flames, smoke come in rays; the city was dark, in haze
    Mist of our own men and lays, the whole world was in craze
    What’s here stays, but what’s gone you start to praise
    Hell is easily related to the cities blaze, but it’s a phase
    It’s how they pay? The towers parting their ways
    But the mark stays, and the night was not darker than the days
    In amaze, looking down on the streets seeing cars in a maze
    Gaze at the fire, water can’t fight what the metal and blood weighs
    Not even delays the running, the siren displays our days

    Let Jesus seize us, pick, please us, and greet us
    Or secure us like the police, just a piece
    I wish this world would just come to agreements of peace
    Caprice the thought of a God, no more of the cease
    Last edited by Westcoast; January 14th, 2009 at 04:17 AM
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    Re: September Stories

    Hey man.. i fucking swear you are one talented writer... i seen many of your pieces and this was one of the best one i ever read man... you got intellegent skills and really i think you are the best writer in this site man.. i mean i cant believe your sick multies flows and creativity about 9/11 and bringing the memories back.. i also love the imagery and everything in this piece.... reading this made me seem like i was just there picturing it right in front of me... i swear man i love to read more pieces from you like this.. keep your head up westcoast!!!!!!!!!

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    Nice piece man....even if it is late...Ive read a few pieces like this one before, but this one was still well written....nice imagery and vocab....a pretty long read for 6:45am, heh,
    but still I enjoyed it....you kept the story nice and consistent throught, word choice and rhyme scheme were good....couple lines stretched out a little but no big deal...keep em comin man...hope to see more...

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    i am happy to have picked you up as one of our topical heads for scytso cause you captivate such a fucking reader as myself with the stories you dwell upon my dude. i liked the whole scenerio you put in and the break offs were great. your dictiona nd content was nicely assorted and you did not force anything in my eyes. i read this smoothly and the flow of it was nicely done. nice shit my dude.. stay up writing

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    Thanks for the feed tactixx and Mr.Write... good that you guys enjoyed it.
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    What tha fuck u want me to say my dude?! LOL, U said it all already, goddamn!!!!!! Great storytelling with usage of multis and a sick flow, some peeps are good storytellers but cant flow or vice-versa, my nig, u found tha middle ground and hit it hard. This is some inspirational shit

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    Quote Originally Posted by BEAZY813 View Post
    What tha fuck u want me to say my dude?! LOL, U said it all already, goddamn!!!!!! Great storytelling with usage of multis and a sick flow, some peeps are good storytellers but cant flow or vice-versa, my nig, u found tha middle ground and hit it hard. This is some inspirational shit
    Appreciate that shit man...
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    i cant believe this sikk piece is bein slept on

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    Re: September Stories

    damn nice shit yo.........the birds eye view had good visual..............I ain't gunna front when i first seen this i was like its way too long but after i read it i was like damn.............i'm blown away........someone ought to nominate it for OM HOF...............
    deep shit.................

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    Quote Originally Posted by Calvin Kold View Post
    damn nice shit yo.........the birds eye view had good visual..............I ain't gunna front when i first seen this i was like its way too long but after i read it i was like damn.............i'm blown away........someone ought to nominate it for OM HOF...............
    deep shit.................

    P.S. if you could return the favor on my drop............critique it.....tell me what i could work on..............
    Appreciate the fee Calvin.
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