Killin It (on that doom shit)

[nineties flava]

I tried to switch up my style to something that was decently hard to replicate... I chose doom because he's one of my favorite rappers. You can tell me if it worked or not.

here's the beat:

[youtube]T8qBjMffjnM[/youtube]

Killin It

I'm killin again, who rise up and get me/
die willin the pen to write somethin witty//
try reelin it in, fore you go overboard/
n fuck with the ovalords; duck its jehova's sword//
comin to keep yee unfaithful in check/
nothin you peeps plead gon make ol' tinhead//
back da fuck up... I got sticky fingaz/
from sticking emsingas; some flipping men need ta//
get a grip; stop tryna go nuts n off me/
actin like dem sobs who buy the donuts n coffee//
yo cut is off-beat; so what if blahzay/
blah's my steelo; yo jalopi live-in ass need to stop//
playin ceelo, get a hobby feed ya kids every night cause/
on the d-low, even Pilsburry wont let you see dough//

(break)

ay yo, guess what I heard ya kids sayin the other day...

(food, we need food!)

verse 2:

still killin it, someone snuck a chill pill in his/
drink but it didn't matter; DOOM be kill billin kids//
illa than ill bill, reala than real deal/
rappas claim to be; they all the same to me//
take a seat; I dont wanna hear dude's life story just/
eitha shut up or I'll add ya ass to my quarry list//
thanks to I-40 it's not safe to hide behind a screen/
once I find the cyba fiends leave em idolizin me//


links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ng-372750.html


I'll get the 2nd link in a sec

uppin

[nineties flava]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...al-365698.html

[antology]

This peice was pretty nice, had some nice multis and most of your rhymes were good too, maybe some a bit basic but barley noticed it. Had a nice flow going especially in the second verse
"still killin it, someone snuck a chill pill in his/
drink but it didn't matter; DOOM be kill billin kids//
illa than ill bill, reala than real deal/"

Fav bit.
Overall id give this peice bout a 8/10.
Keep it up man

[Seedy]

This peice was pretty nice, had some nice multis and most of your rhymes were good too, maybe some a bit basic but barley noticed it. Had a nice flow going especially in the second verse
"still killin it, someone snuck a chill pill in his/
drink but it didn't matter; DOOM be kill billin kids//
illa than ill bill, reala than real deal/"

Fav bit.
Overall id give this peice bout a 8/10.
Keep it up man

i agree

[nineties flava]

uppin

[Bootleg MC]

cool realgood peice personally i liked the first verse the most

[uncontrollable flow]

Very nice. The first verse had some nice rhymes and a good flow but I prefered the second verse especially:

still killin it, someone snuck a chill pill in his/
drink but it didn't matter; DOOM be kill billin kids//
illa than ill bill, reala than real deal/
rappas claim to be; they all the same to me//

That flowed dopely and was straight fire. More of this and you will deffinetly be one of the best here.

[nineties flava]

thanks for the feed zedbrar & bootleg

uppin

[Cole Delavergne]

def ready for audio if you haven't started yet... you got the concept down pretty well and i rode it on the beat ..matter fact check out my soundclick dude im sorry i stole ya song ..i gave you props though in the lyrics..its in font size 2 so its kinda hard to see...










fuckn witcha lol nice drop ..short but cool

[nineties flava]

^LOL

I almost believed it for a second and probably would've had I not read the last part... I was about to close it in disbelief but yeah lol thanks for the feed

uppin