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    'The Fall And Fall Of Satan The Wise.'

    The Malevolent Leader Abides In His Keep, He's Been Harboured Tormented.
    Luxuries Are Repetitive, Alas, Could God's Cerebral Armour Be Dented?
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    The Malevolent Leader Abides In His Keep, He's Been Harboured Tormented.
    Luxuries Are Repetitive, Alas, Could God's Cerebral Armour Be Dented?





    *The Annual Conversation Between God And Satan Takes Place In Purgatory, Their Neutral Meeting Point,*

    *God Is Almost Weary Looking, And Holds His Sacred Visage In His Hands.*

    *He Speaks To Satan In A Defeated Tone.*



    The Worlds In Chaos, I Knew This Might Happen, Havoc Oh How It Ravages,
    Repeating The Averages, Tyrants, Humans Are Feeding These Savages.
    Reaching And Grasping, The Humans Slip Away, They're Discreet And Outlasting,
    They Care Not About Me, Angels Are Dying And Now The Last Sing.
    With Certain Disdain, I Am God, My Shoulders Are Burdened With Pain.
    I Would Return Jesus To Earth, But I Can't Allow Him To Heal To Be Hurtin' Again.
    Im Assertive My Friend, I Sense A Change, We Need To Reach An Agreement.
    Shall We Call Upon The 4 Horsemen? And Quite Simply Steal An Achievement.
    Sin, Isn't That What They Repent For? Give Lent For, Answer Me Fallen One.
    Us? We Shall Co-Operate, For I Dare Not Risk Jesus Again, My Solemn Son.


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    The Malevolent Leader Abides In His Keep, He's Been Harboured Tormented.
    Luxuries Are Repetitive, Alas, Could God's Cerebral Armour Be Dented

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    *Satan Views God Now.. He Realises What Exactly He's Thinking, 'God Is Weak.. I Should Pounce', Which Way Would Be Best To Approach This?? He Ponders To Himself,

    *He Replies In An Ingratiating Manner.*


    I Thought You'd See it, Brother, We Have Had Patience With These Mortal Beings,
    Many Centuries Have Passed, And They Still Possess Immortal Dreams.
    Oh Holy One, I Have Been Lying In Wait Wonderin' Would You Keep Denyin' Me Fate?
    Defyin' The State, War's Have Murdered Our Earth, In My Mind It's Too Late
    Men Have Fouled And Polluted, The Atmospheric Problem On Ground Was Disputed.
    Now Brother, We Must Rise Up And Crush These Pilgrims, Our Power Is Reputed.
    With Fright, The Lands Numb, An Alliance, It May Seem A Fight So Random,
    My Holy Friend We Must Join As One And Ultimately Unite In Tandem.
    First Destroy Our Competition, Wipe Out The Four Horseman, I Would Not Betray You.
    I Pray, Truth! I Know You , As Your Mind Portrays What Not Your Face Do.
    What Do You Say, Join With Me? Release Me From My Tormented Luxury? Do Disperse.
    I May Rule Hell.. But It's Not Enough For Me, Together We Can Build A New Universe.


    The Malevolent Leader Abides In His Keep, He's Been Harboured Tormented.
    Luxuries Are Repetitive, Alas, Could God's Cerebral Armour Be Dented?



    *God Sighs, It Is A Terrible Sound, Felt All Over The Universe.. It Has A Sense Of Helplessness About It.. He Looks Up, His Majestic Features Are Aged Beyond Time, And A Tear Falls From His Cheek.. Like A Crystal Droplet.*

    *He Looks At Satan*

    * Satan Smiles With An Aura Of Complete Triumph.*


    Not What I Wish, You Make It Sound Wondrous And Carefree, Top Of My List.
    Its True I Ponder, As You Offer Me This, Who Can Deny? An Eternity Of Bliss?
    Ive Seen Your Elated Face, But You Agree...That I Would Accept Your Stated Case,
    You Already Know, My Decision's Been Made.. It's Now Become A Tainted Race,
    A Saintly Taste, I Scathe Thee Satan, Who Knew You Could Spin Such Tales?
    Me Your Brother?! Scum! Nay, Here is Where Your Story Of Such Fails,
    You Speak Of Loyalty And Enthralling Feelings.. And The Souls Purity And Enrichment.
    With Lastin' Resistant, Indeed, You Felt All These Once, But Bastard, The Past Is Distant.
    I May Be Weak, But I Created Man, I Will Stand By Them Until I Choose To Move On.
    That Is Not Now, Thats Another Story.. Which Is Entwined Upon A New Song,
    You've Never Been In Love, Nor Felt Romance.. Therefore Man Is Greater Than You,
    Your A Liar, Would Gladly Betray Me If You Had Half The Chance, Nay, Tis True.
    Don't Play The Fool Nor Jester, You Have Some Wits About You, Still Lurking Around.
    Leave As Your Found, Return To Your Hole, And Forever Remain Deep In The Ground.




    *God Waves His Hand, And Satan Once Again Is Banished To His Land Of The Dead.*

    *God Stands Up With Awe Inspiring Fluency And Laughs, A Bemused Look Upon His Face*

    *He Utters A Sentence In Solitude , Almost Inaudible Against The Ever Boisterous Wind In This Place

    ''Well I'll Be Damned, He Almost Got Me*



    The Malevolent Leader Abides In His Keep, He's Been Harboured Tormented.
    Luxuries Are Repetitive, Alas, Could God's Cerebral Armour Be Dented?
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    Re: 'The Fall And Fall Of Satan The Wise.'

    I Fed


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    Re: 'The Fall And Fall Of Satan The Wise.'

    lols dude this is long..
    but once again worth the read..
    ima sum up a decent paragraph for this
    later...to lazy right now lol

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    Re: 'The Fall And Fall Of Satan The Wise.'

    man this is sum deep poetic ass shit i mean realy worth reading and alot of content im really usually not into shit like this but it didnt bore me or piss me off at all very well put together overall
    so keep droppin.....

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    Re: 'The Fall And Fall Of Satan The Wise.'

    thanks^

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    Re: 'The Fall And Fall Of Satan The Wise.'

    smh dont sleep.

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    Re: 'The Fall And Fall Of Satan The Wise.'

    damn, long ass piece, paragraphs, lol, but overall nice n poetic, everything flowed as well, rhyme scheme a little average, thats ok, emotion is there, i was looking for just a little more imagery though, but nice piece no real complaints.

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    Re: 'The Fall And Fall Of Satan The Wise.'

    Closed, pm me 2 links you've feed on and i'll reopen this.

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