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@mv @Bag Mandela
if garbage fills the front lines when it was just stagnant
Spree, you see, they think, you ready for more trash since you put bag’n it
Stab in twist deep till ya organs leak, make it to the door or you aint free
Then tell him it’s a game show, anything that falls out of bag ya cant keep
I'm a nut, dumb fuck i bet knife workll muck up flesh
now you chalked out in the front line..boosie don't get cuts this fresh
or your slut get stretched, nah i don't want that diseased sleezy bitch
if manure she a dirtbag to be fking with that a piece of shit
he cant keep a bitch she gotta young beau on the side
you can tell how ragged baggage that she been taking you on a ride
its eatin you alive stop acting sour tho or ill pumpernickle inside
focaccia mind if you think baguette bread longer than mine
My bad thought it was 4-6 lines
I'll arrange your death sucka, my shooter just called in,
You bout to get a beam through your window like a beautiful morning,
Ballin, I sell sick doja & my bitch a model,
You have family games of strip poker & spin the bottle,
I checked your last battle to see the effort needed pennin these rhymes,
Since you lost to Mac - D's will deffo put M in the sky,
-You were estrogenized, non-attacking, instant fem,
-Called him handsome after n looked a bitch again,
-Plus you rhymed hold with hold, you using Pitbull's pen?
When you're missing 3 points it's not hard to belittle m
MV gets my vote here for harder hitting punches. More personalized, even tho I felt his booskie line was the lotb and it was generic. Bag I liked your opener but you shuold focus more on creative punchlines, shit that hasn’t been used before, but you def have potential and it wasn’t a bad verse at all. But when u put “-“ at the start of your lines it’s kinda corny no hate just telling it how I see it my dude, You just got outexperienced here but keep eating and keep learning
Mvgt MV
if garbage fills the front lines when it was just stagnant
Spree, you see, they think, you ready for more trash since you put bag’n it
Simple but solid, not digging the choppy flow with all the commas in the punch though
Stab in twist deep till ya organs leak, make it to the door or you aint free
Then tell him it’s a game show, anything that falls out of bag ya cant keep
Basic but cool. Lowkey horrorcore. Tighter multis would’ve emphasized the punch.
I'm a nut, dumb fuck i bet knife workll muck up flesh
now you chalked out in the front line..boosie don't get cuts this fresh
I was just roasting a chicken with Mind of a Maniac stuck in my head for no reason, so that’s sick. Idk what that has to do with anything, but hell yea, Boosie bro
or your slut get stretched, nah i don't want that diseased sleezy bitch
if manure she a dirtbag to be fking with that a piece of shit
Nahhhh, that’s wack imho
he cant keep a bitch she gotta young beau on the side
you can tell how ragged baggage that she been taking you on a ride
Bag is/baggage? Ehh. Also “taking you on a ride” as a euphemism for cheating isn’t really the hardest way to execute that concept imo
its eatin you alive stop acting sour tho or ill pumpernickle inside
focaccia mind if you think baguette bread longer than mine
Focaccia/fuck out ya mind is a reach and corny to me, no offense. Pumpernickle is kinda the same. The baguette concept was your best moment, but again, I think you could’ve executed it better. Associative wordplay is cool and valid and all, but sometimes a good concept can be watered down by overdoing the supporting wordplay.
I'll arrange your death sucka, my shooter just called in,
You bout to get a beam through your window like a beautiful morning,
Lloyd Banks-esque. Fine, and clever enough, but it boils down to a beam/beam pun, so you could’ve probably done more
Ballin, I sell sick doja & my bitch a model,
You have family games of strip poker & spin the bottle,
Lmaoooo @ “I sell sick doja”... not talking shit, but that sounds like something McLovin would say. I’m assuming you worded it that way to rhyme with “strip poker”, but that’s a case of overdoing multis and shooting yourself in the foot. The punch itself is filler-ish, kinda Grind Timey
I checked your last battle to see the effort needed pennin these rhymes,
Since you lost to Mac - D's will deffo put M in the sky,
Best bar of the battle so far imo
-You were estrogenized, non-attacking, instant fem,
-Called him handsome after n looked a bitch again,
-Plus you rhymed hold with hold, you using Pitbull's pen?
When you're missing 3 points it's not hard to belittle m
Instant fem is kinda weird but I see what you’re saying. The final punch is tight, second best of the battle to me. Usually one-letter nameflips are forced and corny, but A. Those were pretty clever, and B. His name is literally “MV”, so I guess you didn’t have a lot to work with.
I’m voting Bag because he had the two best bars of the battle to me, and because his flow was better. MV had good concepts, but could’ve executed them more effectively. Y’all both were cool though, and this is a pretty close battle imo
This was close battle to me
Both Punchlines Heavy hitter
Both Concepts decent
Both opener good
I like MV bars more
Vote-MV
Quote:
Originally Posted by MV
Quote:
Originally Posted by Bag Mandela
Solid battle. But one drove his punches home with better execution.
Vote - Bag
2-1 bag
Vote bag
I thought his shit connected a little better.. I liked the flow n delivery with mv but it was either light or didn’t connect… bag had like jabs but they were consistent light jabs
V.MV/close battle, felt MV's lines were a lil more creative, could go either way
@Fresh @King @Kill Spree @King Dee Bee @Slayerr. @Blas . @Mac. @Fitzgerald @Ryno
Any chance you fine gentlemen can drop a vote?
if garbage fills the front lines when it was just stagnant
Spree, you see, they think, you ready for more trash since you put bag’n it
really like the concept but no so much the execution. decent
Stab in twist deep till ya organs leak, make it to the door or you aint free
Then tell him it’s a game show, anything that falls out of bag ya cant keep
again love the concept but not the execution so much
I'm a nut, dumb fuck i bet knife workll muck up flesh
now you chalked out in the front line..boosie don't get cuts this fresh
cool
or your slut get stretched, nah i don't want that diseased sleezy bitch
if manure she a dirtbag to be fking with that a piece of shit
stretch with the np but still cool
he cant keep a bitch she gotta young beau on the side
you can tell how ragged baggage that she been taking you on a ride
doesn't make sense to me
its eatin you alive stop acting sour tho or ill pumpernickle inside
focaccia mind if you think baguette bread longer than mine
not feelin it
vs
I'll arrange your death sucka, my shooter just called in,
You bout to get a beam through your window like a beautiful morning,
nice
Ballin, I sell sick doja & my bitch a model,
You have family games of strip poker & spin the bottle,
lol light but funny
I checked your last battle to see the effort needed pennin these rhymes,
Since you lost to Mac - D's will deffo put M in the sky,
diggin it..
-You were estrogenized, non-attacking, instant fem,
-Called him handsome after n looked a bitch again,
not feelin this
-Plus you rhymed hold with hold, you using Pitbull's pen?
When you're missing 3 points it's not hard to belittle m
i dont get it
Overall pretty close but i felt bag was a more enjoyable read overall.
v/ bag mandela
if garbage fills the front lines when it was just stagnant
Spree, you see, they think, you ready for more trash since you put bag’n it
Vs
I'll arrange your death sucka, my shooter just called in,
You bout to get a beam through your window like a beautiful morning,
-Plus you rhymed hold with hold, you using Pitbull's pen?
When you're missing 3 points it's not hard to belittle m
No real haymakers here but think bag had less misses than MV and had the slightly nicer bars. Not a lot in this though
V/bag
if garbage fills the front lines when it was just stagnant
(Spree, you see, they think, you ready for more trash since you put bag’n it
(I liked this line because of the bag - trash connection)
or your slut get stretched, nah i don't want that diseased sleezy bitch
if manure she a dirtbag to be fking with that a piece of shit
I thought this was okay, but probably could have been worded a bit better. Liked the dirtbag line
VS.
I'll arrange your death sucka, my shooter just called in,
You bout to get a beam through your window like a beautiful morning,
I did like the wordplay in this line (beam)
Ballin, I sell sick doja & my bitch a model,
You have family games of strip poker & spin the bottle,
I thought this was cool (flow / wordplay=
I checked your last battle to see the effort needed pennin these rhymes,
Since you lost to Mac - D's will deffo put M in the sky,
I thought this was okay.
I thought this was a decent battle, but Voting Bag Mandela (BM). I felt that the flow was more solid throughout his verse which lead to the punches connecting a little better. I dont have the 50 required posts to do a polled vote yet according to the FL rules. If I get allowed to enter the 1-2 punch battle, then I will drop a link to that battle.
Bag wins 6-2.