"Super Mario Bros"

SUPER MARIO BROS

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"Mama-Mia!" murmured Mario with a drop of his head
more at the thought of missin' the Lakers game than the fact that Yoshi was dead
with the loss of his pet botherin' him less than not seein' the game was
...our hero mised on how this shit ALWAYS seemed to happen on his day off!
He thought that he'd got away from those detours to distant lands
his overalls no longer fit, so he was forced to wear a pair of christmas pants
with the band that's width expanded & gave him more room
cuz since retirement his size & weight had ballooned without him even tasting a shroom...
It seemed another vacation was due, though he still felt nautious and queasy
the scent of gin practically travelling down the line as he called up Luigi
'It's-a me, Mario!' he slurred, 'fore relayin' events surroundin' the corpse
'...D'you know who it was?' asked Luigi 'Who'd you think you giant goomba - Bowser of course!'
'Last one there's a rotten toadstool,' Luigi quipped after all was said
& Mario reached for his discolored cap to help cover up his balding head...

A swooping sun soared ahead over Mushroom Kingdom's blocks and trees
...Mario was caught at least twice humming the Delfino Plaza theme..
as he squashed & squeezed his rotund frame into the top of a pipe
emerging at the bottom to find time was once again not on his side!
..he plodded on by with an iron will behind his determined gaze
and a strong must stashed beneath a mustache that was turning gray..
heard him say Peach had prolly been kidnapped again. He hadnt swung by Bowser's place in a minute
but anyway it transfigured they may as well save her bullemic ass while they're payin' a visit..
only the castles face had looked different, it was no longer the fortress admired in stone
..outside the old building King Koopa's castle looked more like Koopa's Retirement Home..
Mario sized the Bones up who flanked its entrance &
prepared to squash 'em
..but the aging guards simply waved him through as he was there so often!
Bowsers hair had softened, yet he retained a hint of menace to his bitter rapport
only now the Koopa Troopers were gone, & he relied on a walking stick for support
neither was as fit as before back when their rivalry was fierce
and they vied in it for years throughout the heights of their careers
Mario sensed all wasnt quite as it appeared, as this should have been easy
but he hadn't banked on Yoshi's executioner being his brother... 'Luigi!'
he'd misjudged him completely. before Mario could prepare an attack
with the Fire Flower Luigi launched a high-powered fireball into the square of his back
there was the fact he dared to dispatch of Koopa second which offered no forgiving
but in his own Warped mind he believed he'd finally one-upped his older sibling
Below his grimace, Mario's podgy face grew sullen and callow
Their roles had reversed and it was no longer Luigi who stood in his shadow...
he took up the mantle Koopa left thinkin' he'd earned the right to be revered
that night had made it clear enough their rivalry was fierce
and though they'd vied in it for years throughout the heights of their careers,
Mario's biggest enemy wasnt Koopa.
It was Luigi's jealousy that he'd hide beneath his fears...

LOL!!


Funny and interesting piece here, Baron. You're an incredible writer. I'll be honest with you, I'm not a big fan on the direction of the piece, but I can appreciate the brilliance of your wording and structure. You're great at what you do, and you hold it well. So yeah, to break it down: Great imagery and wording, a great rhyme scheme, nice subject and form, a OK topic, and unparalleled ability of execution - well done!

Intresting, and nice switch from nursery rhymes to Multis while keeping your rhyme scheme, and its full of wittiness,and you worked with the topic, keep up bro, sick drop.