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Lol. This was ok man. I can't say that I would listen to it again, and I DO think you need to work on your wordplay. However, I think the flow and delivery was really well, especially for this beat. You repeated a few words too many times which definitely takes away from the entertainment. I would say just work on being more constructive with your lyrics and you'll be set man. Good drop!
haha this was aight bro
nice swag n delivery/flow
punches kinda forced
but u be killin me with the nerdo glasses hahaha
df u throw the joint away for broooo party foul
nice shit rtf
Not feeling the beat at all, but with that out the way it's not that bad. I like the lyrics in this, it's what stands out for me. Voice seems off of the actual song lyrics, or that may be just me. I like the video concept in this was pretty cool, i like the look of that mic. Could have been a bit longer, maybe with a chorus but that's only my preference. Not bad man, keep doing ya thing!
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meh, i hate this beat and am sure a million people have done verses to it as well, so that being said this doesnt stand out at all fro many that have been done, so i suggest not doing mainstream tracks of today cuz every wannabe gone use them to try to match they skills with wayne and that other retard on this original......your delivery was good and flow was for most part, lyrics mehhh, as someone mentioned above the punches sounded forced
Not really good in comparison to the original
Delivery is basic on the beat no complexity
Lyrically punches are kind of basic need to work on the cleverness
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yeah heard mad ppl over this one.....flow is decent....lyrics a bit generic...delivery ain't bad tho...nice little promo vid too works well...i gotta start doing these....you do these yourself?
overall not a bad verse man keep it up
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not bad you just gotta work on your flow and delivery to match the beat and you should be good, like others said some parts sound forced you need to just let the words flow out. like someone told me if you have to take out or add words to match the flow then go for it. over all not a bad drop
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