The Legend That Sleeps

The Legend That Sleeps

imagen it, hands are waving and the energy is high.
take a stab at it.. trance is craving you to finish it with lines.
i lock words in the zone, & start from scratch.
the pot burns round my bones, my heart pumps fast.
a touch of stage fright, spot the light and staring eyes.
a rush of rage egnites, hot & bright, tearing inside.
the mic calls my name, mind just screams "QUEEN, ARE YOU INSANE?"
jus mite fall to fame, time for dreams to leave the brain.
let the first bit of spit split of the edge of my tounge.
let the burst of air the sits to slip up to the tip of my lungs.
been waiting, slowly approaching the day that I break.
anticipating, flowing to openings where it plays with the hate.
wack words spilling through my teeth, i cant chomp it down.
tracks turns, feelings move the beat and stomp the crowd.
Leave everything i got & know to amaze, erupt with diverse ryhmes.
Believe this thing wont just go as a phase, but will lurk minds.
Change the world just a little, make them consider facts.
play with a whril of riddlers then take the trigger back.
Blow a hole in their skin, & drape my presence with heat.
Know the flow from within & awake the legend that sleeps.

& the legend that sleeps, has now awaken on stage...


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let the first bit of spit split of the edge of my tounge.
let the burst of air the sits to slip up to the tip of my lungs.

^that was definately my favorite part.. prolly cause it had my name in it.. haha, jokes. Anyways.. this was ok, I usually don't bust balls about grammar and spelling, but in this case it actually kind of fucked with the flow of the piece.. some points were riddled with misplaced vocab as well. decent stuff though. I like the subject matter.. I love getting on stage.. it's a rush.. "sweet, they gave me a crowd to play with" type shit. keep on keepin on. Oh, and the finishing line really tied the piece together, I liked it.

could you hit this up for me?

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ac-351459.html

Tight

thanks for the feed, uppin'

this was cool,creative...i thought this was a little technical and could have been pulled off with more fluency given some more imagery....but your rhymes and shit were all on point and i give you props definitly for being creative and steppin out the box....keep it up